WC ⋆ Chapter 42

# AMENDED TRANSLATION

Fooling around in the shopping mall for a while, Qi Lin was so tired he could barely keep his eyes open.

The advantages of turning into a ghost were obvious: no matter what, no one could see them. The disadvantages were equally obvious: they couldn’t touch anything in this time-space, couldn’t shower, and couldn’t use any tools.

Jiang Yishen, with his mischievous streak, had gotten everything stuck inside him. He had expected Qi Lin to scold him, but contrary to expectations, Qi Lin not only didn’t get angry but leaned against him in a thoroughly dependent way, eyes half-closed and dozing.

What had flowed out had been wiped away, but there was still some deep inside that couldn’t be gotten out. Jiang Yishen shook him awake and asked if he felt uncomfortable. Qi Lin shook his head, his hair brushing against Jiang Yishen’s neck and making it itch.

Jiang Yishen decided to head home first and deal with it from there. He carried Qi Lin back, and when they passed through the door, “Qi Lin” was sitting at the dining table arguing with “Jiang Yishen” on the phone, the argument identical to yesterday’s.

He patted Qi Lin on the back: “You’re scolding me again, telling me to have the person move into the lower bunk and provide full room and board.”

Qi Lin listened and let out a small laugh: “You still don’t know who the other person is.”

“Ah, there was so much going on. Once the money was paid back, I stopped paying attention. I remember paying it back the day after the surgery, I think it was money he’d scraped together from home.” Jiang Yishen set him down on the sofa. “My dad had been feeling unwell around that time, kept feeling nauseous, and we thought it was his appetite. He went to the hospital for tests several times. Then at the end of the month when school started, I got summoned by the instructor.”

The word “instructor” was almost enough to trigger a stress response. Qi Lin remembered something important: “Speaking of that, was Yu Jiaming at school over summer break? Go check what he was up to. Don’t tell me he really has a crush on you.”

Jiang Yishen nearly gagged at that, but this retrospective loop had no telling when it would end. Since they were idle anyway, they might as well go keep an eye on someone annoying.

A kiss broke the loop. They successfully made it to the sun of August 3rd, and Jiang Yishen took Qi Lin to haunt Yu Jiaming’s dormitory. There weren’t many students on campus during summer break, but this floor was still fairly lively.

“This whole section is our year. A lot of people stayed on campus to study for the graduate entrance exams,” Jiang Yishen said.

“All three of your roommates stayed on campus,” Qi Lin said, thinking of the three people he’d seen in the dorm the night before.

Jiang Yishen glanced at him: “Fan Zi is a local and doesn’t want to go home. One of the other two roommates is studying for the entrance exams and the other is doing an internship here.”

As they talked, they passed the familiar dorm room door. It was ajar, and faint sounds came from inside. Jiang Yishen poked his head in for a horrified look, then pulled back and said: “Just Fan Zi in there.”

Yu Jiaming’s dorm room was nearby. Jiang Yishen remembered it very clearly. After being reported, he had specifically asked for the room number and had even calculated the distance between the two of them, puzzled over how this person managed to keep tabs on so many competitors at once.

Through the small window on the door, Yu Jiaming’s dorm room was dim inside, as if the curtains were drawn and the lights were off.

“No one there?” Qi Lin instinctively reached up to knock.

“Yu Jiaming couldn’t possibly have left campus.” Jiang Yishen pulled him straight through the door. The moment they entered, both of them got a fright.

His three roommates had all gone home for the break, and one of them had covered their bed and desk with a semi-transparent plastic sheet. The cold air from the air conditioner made the plastic sheet billow, looking like something out of a cheap horror film.

The curtains were indeed drawn. The room was pitch dark, with only a small desk lamp lit at Yu Jiaming’s spot, set to its lowest brightness. The glow of the laptop screen reflected off his glasses, and Yu Jiaming sat alone at his desk.

“Damn, that’s terrifying.” Jiang Yishen stepped back and ducked behind Qi Lin.

“You’re the ghost, what are you scared of?” Qi Lin was equally creeped out. He yanked Jiang Yishen out from behind him and pushed him forward until they were standing behind Yu Jiaming.

Now that they were close, they could make out what was on the screen.

An Excel spreadsheet packed with data, its multicolored cells dazzling to the eye. The most prominent row was highlighted in green. One glance was all Jiang Yishen needed to know: he was looking with his own eyes at the legendary, widely rumored, never-fully-seen Investiture of the Gods List.

“This is a little unhinged, isn’t it?” Qi Lin leaned in to look. The spreadsheet was detailed down to the titles of papers published by classmates.

Yu Jiaming stared fixedly at the screen. A click of the mouse, and the interface switched to a PDF of a paper, which turned out to be the one published by the top-ranked girl in the major.

In the reflection of the screen there was only Yu Jiaming, expressionless as he browsed. His finger moved slightly, copied the name of the supervising professor, and dragged it to another window to search.

Qi Lin felt a creeping unease watching this. He turned to look at Jiang Yishen and found the other person already drenched in cold sweat.

“Damn, I feel like he’s going to ruin everyone,” Jiang Yishen said. For the first time, he marveled that he had kept his nose clean all these years, giving no one anything else to grab onto. Otherwise, never mind the guaranteed postgraduate placement, it would be another question entirely whether he could even finish his degree.

It seemed Yu Jiaming also felt the room was too dark. He reached up and turned the desk lamp one notch brighter. Qi Lin seized the chance to get a clear look at the wall directly across from him, which was plastered with sticky notes.

Dense and packed, covered in writing, all in high-saturation marker.

He fixed his gaze on them and broke into a cold sweat, frantically slapping the back of Jiang Yishen’s hand.

Jiang Yishen followed his line of sight. Right in the center was the largest note, pale yellow, with a name written on it in blue ballpoint pen, circled heavily in marker as if the force had gone straight through the paper.

“Who’s this person?”

Jiang Yishen swallowed: “Don’t know. Not from our major.”

He Jian.

Qi Lin repeated the name to himself several times and suddenly felt it sounded familiar, as if he had heard it more than once before. Only in those contexts where it had come up, the name had been incidental, not enough to make him stop and remember it.

The sticky note had He Jian’s phone number, birthday, college, grades, and at the bottom, his home address.

“Holy shit, this isn’t an Investiture of the Gods List, this is a death note.” Jiang Yishen hurriedly scanned the wall and, finding his own name absent, let out a breath of relief.

Qi Lin slowly swept his gaze across. He was surprised to find that these people were not all students from this school. There were students from schools in other regions, and even some who had dropped out of high school, both male and female. The only thing they had in common was that their home addresses were all in the same district of the same city in the same province.

“Do these people have a grudge against him?” Qi Lin asked.

“I don’t know. I barely know him at all.” Jiang Yishen felt a chill rising from the soles of his feet. “I feel like something’s wrong here. Let’s go outside and think it over. I don’t dare speak loudly in this room.”

Qi Lin also felt the place was thick with an eerie air. He tiptoed out, and only after stepping into the sunlight did his nerves settle.

Students passed through the corridor from time to time, so they simply went back to Jiang Yishen’s dorm room and sat side by side on the edge of the bed.

The room was well-lit, the air conditioner blowing a comfortable cool breeze. Fan Zi was slumped in his chair, both feet crossed and propped up on the desk, playing a game on speaker.

The chaotic background noise was oddly reassuring. Qi Lin said: “In a bit I want to go back and take another look. I don’t believe Yu Jiaming is all that innocent. I can’t swallow this. With such a good opportunity right in front of us, not keeping an eye on him would be a waste.”

He had always been bothered by the matter of Jiang Yishen being reported. Unfortunately, not long after it happened, they had broken up. The spot itself was secondary. Voluntarily giving it up and having your eligibility forcibly revoked were not the same thing. Regardless of whether the report had succeeded, what had happened had happened.

“It’s not easy to act this time,” Jiang Yishen said. “It’s different from when I came alone before. This time we can’t make any changes to the time-space. We can’t even turn a page of a book. It’s hard to investigate anything.”

Qi Lin was about to say they should just keep watching him then. A person with a dirty mind wouldn’t do things cleanly either. Even if the public announcement period had long since ended and the admission was already set in stone, he still didn’t want Yu Jiaming to have an easy time in the days ahead.

Before he could speak, the game background noise from the lower bunk was cut off, replaced by a ringtone.

They looked down. Fan Zi was in the thick of battle on the game screen. He swiped to answer without looking, and the sound came out on speaker.

“Lao Lu, is it convenient to talk? Thanks a lot this time. I just had my checkup and my eyes are basically fine. My parents are coming over later.” The person on the other end said. “You got the money, right? When are you free? I’ll treat you all to a meal. I still haven’t met your friends. It was truly help in a time of need.”

“Hey, as long as you’re okay,” Fan Zi said, working the game with both hands, answering casually. “Didn’t they say if the fluid wasn’t absorbed you’d need another surgery? Something about an inner path and outer path, how did that go?”

“All done. Today was the follow-up exam. Things are looking okay. The bandages come off in a couple of days.”

“Did you get in touch with your family? Didn’t your dad say if you ever stopped doing anything serious again, don’t bother coming home?” Fan Zi asked.

The person on the other end laughed a little: “Never mind coming home or not, I nearly went blind. My eyes still have double vision, I keep seeing all kinds of random things, but they can’t find anything wrong. Maybe it’ll clear up once the post-surgery recovery period is over.”

The two of them chatted back and forth for a while longer, the mood light. But the two people sitting on the edge of the upper bunk could no longer smile.

The voice from the receiver was easy to recognize. They knew it all too well.

It was Yin Yu. The person who had been in a car accident half a year ago and had borrowed emergency money from Jiang Yishen to cover the surgery costs was Yin Yu.

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# ISSUE LOG

| Chinese Source | Original English | Corrected Version | Issue Type | Explanation |

|—|—|—|—|—|

| 把东西都弄到了里面 | “had gotten everything inside him” | “had gotten everything stuck inside him” | Awkward phrasing | The original phrasing is unclear. “Stuck inside him” better conveys that the dirt/grime is now on Qi Lin’s body, making it impossible to clean. |

| 不仅没有发火，还十分依赖地扒拉在他身上 | “not only didn’t get angry but leaned against him in a thoroughly dependent way” | “not only didn’t get angry but leaned against him in a thoroughly dependent way” | Accurate | No change needed, but “leaned” could be “clung,” though current translation works. |

| 我记得手术第二天就还上了吧，好像是他周转来家里的钱了 | “I remember paying it back the day after the surgery, I think it was money he’d scraped together from home.” | “I remember paying it back the day after the surgery, I think it was money he’d scraped together from home.” | Accurate | The translation is correct, though “周转来” suggests money borrowed/cycled from home, which is captured. |

| 后来月底一开学就被导员传唤了 | “Then at the end of the month when school started, I got summoned by the Instructor.” | “Then at the end of the month when school started, I got summoned by the instructor.” | Grammar/capitalization | “Instructor” should not be capitalized as a generic title when used mid-sentence. |

| “导员”两个字听得人快要应激了 | “The word “Instructor” was almost enough to trigger a stress response.” | “The word “instructor” was almost enough to trigger a stress response.” | Grammar/capitalization | Same as above. “Instructor” should be lowercase. |

| 索性闲着也是闲着，不如去监视一下讨厌的人 | “and since they were idle anyway, they might as well go keep an eye on someone annoying” | “Since they were idle anyway, they might as well go keep an eye on someone annoying.” | Punctuation/flow | Minor adjustment for better flow. The original has a slightly awkward structure. |

| 接吻打破了循环，顺利见到8月3日的太阳 | “A kiss broke the loop. They successfully made it to the sun of August 3rd” | “A kiss broke the loop. They successfully made it to the sun of August 3rd” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 江亦深带着戚林去于嘉明的寝室闹鬼 | “Jiang Yishen took Qi Lin to haunt Yu Jiaming’s Dormitory” | “Jiang Yishen took Qi Lin to haunt Yu Jiaming’s dormitory” | Capitalization | “Dormitory” should be lowercase. |

| 这块都是我们这届的，好多人留校考研 | “This whole section is our year. A lot of people stayed on campus to study for the graduate entrance exams” | “This whole section is our year. A lot of people stayed on campus to study for the graduate entrance exams” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 凡子是本地人，不愿意回家，两个室友一个在考研一个在这边实习 | “Fan Zi is a local and doesn’t want to go home. One of the other two roommates is studying for the entrance exams and the other is doing an internship here.” | “Fan Zi is a local and doesn’t want to go home. One of the other two roommates is studying for the entrance exams and the other is doing an internship here.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 门是虚掩着，里面依稀有声音，江亦深惊悚地谈个脑袋进去看了眼 | “It was ajar, and faint sounds came from inside. Jiang Yishen poked his head in for a horrified look” | “It was ajar, and faint sounds came from inside. Jiang Yishen poked his head in for a horrified look” | Accurate | The translation captures the meaning, though “惊悚地” (in a startled/horrified manner) is well-rendered. |

| 在被举报后他特意问了宿舍号，还推算了一下两个人的距离，纳闷这人到底怎么做到同时监视那么多竞争对手 | “After being reported, he had specifically asked for the room number and had even calculated the distance between the two of them, puzzled over how this person managed to keep tabs on so many competitors at once.” | “After being reported, he had specifically asked for the room number and had even calculated the distance between the two of them, puzzled over how this person managed to keep tabs on so many competitors at once.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 透过门上的小窗，于嘉明的宿舍内昏暗一片，像拉着窗帘没有开 | “Through the small window on the door, Yu Jiaming’s dorm room was dim inside, as if the curtains were drawn and the lights were off.” | “Through the small window on the door, Yu Jiaming’s dorm room was dim inside, as if the curtains were drawn and the lights were off.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “没有人？”戚林下意识还要敲门 | “”No one there?” Qi Lin instinctively reached up to knock.” | “”No one there?” Qi Lin instinctively reached up to knock.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 江亦深直接拉着他飘进去 | “Jiang Yishen pulled him straight through the door.” | “Jiang Yishen pulled him straight through the door.” | Accurate | “飘进去” (float/drift through) is captured by “pulled him straight through.” |

| 其中一个人用半透明的塑料罩盖住了自己的床位和桌子，空调的冷风吹起塑料罩，瞧着像劣质鬼片 | “one of them had covered their bed and desk with a semi-transparent plastic sheet. The cold air from the air conditioner made the plastic sheet billow, looking like something out of a cheap horror film.” | “one of them had covered their bed and desk with a semi-transparent plastic sheet. The cold air from the air conditioner made the plastic sheet billow, looking like something out of a cheap horror film.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 屋子里黑沉沉，只有于嘉明的位置上亮着一盏小台灯，亮度是最低的那一档 | “The room was pitch dark, with only a small desk lamp lit at Yu Jiaming’s spot, set to its lowest brightness.” | “The room was pitch dark, with only a small desk lamp lit at Yu Jiaming’s spot, set to its lowest brightness.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 笔记本电脑的荧光打在眼镜片上，于嘉明独自坐在桌前 | “The glow of the laptop screen reflected off his glasses, and Yu Jiaming sat alone at his desk.” | “The glow of the laptop screen reflected off his glasses, and Yu Jiaming sat alone at his desk.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “操，好吓人。”江亦深倒退一步，缩到戚林身后 | “”Damn, that’s terrifying.” Jiang Yishen stepped back and ducked behind Qi Lin.” | “”Damn, that’s terrifying.” Jiang Yishen stepped back and ducked behind Qi Lin.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “你是鬼你怕什么？”戚林也瘆得慌，把江亦深从身后揪出来，推着他走到于嘉明身后 | “”You’re the ghost, what are you scared of?” Qi Lin was equally creeped out. He yanked Jiang Yishen out from behind him and pushed him forward until they were standing behind Yu Jiaming.” | “”You’re the ghost, what are you scared of?” Qi Lin was equally creeped out. He yanked Jiang Yishen out from behind him and pushed him forward until they were standing behind Yu Jiaming.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 一个填满数据的Excel表格，五颜六色的框看得人眼花缭乱，最醒目的一行被标成绿色 | “An Excel spreadsheet packed with data, its multicolored cells dazzling to the eye. The most prominent row was highlighted in green.” | “An Excel spreadsheet packed with data, its multicolored cells dazzling to the eye. The most prominent row was highlighted in green.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 江亦深只看一眼便得知，他亲眼见到了那鼎鼎大名、只流传于江湖传闻中的、无人窥见过全貌的封神榜 | “One glance was all Jiang Yishen needed to know: he was looking with his own eyes at the legendary, widely rumored, never-fully-seen Investiture of the Gods List.” | “One glance was all Jiang Yishen needed to know: he was looking with his own eyes at the legendary, widely rumored, never-fully-seen Investiture of the Gods List.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “这有点病态了吧？”戚林俯身去看，那表格中甚至精确到同学发表的论文的名称 | “”This is a little unhinged, isn’t it?” Qi Lin leaned in to look. The spreadsheet was detailed down to the titles of papers published by classmates.” | “”This is a little unhinged, isn’t it?” Qi Lin leaned in to look. The spreadsheet was detailed down to the titles of papers published by classmates.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 于嘉明直勾勾地盯着屏幕，手中鼠标”咔哒”一声，界面切换到论文pdf界面，赫然是专业第一名的女生发表的那一篇 | “Yu Jiaming stared fixedly at the screen. A click of the mouse, and the interface switched to a PDF of a paper, which turned out to be the one published by the top-ranked girl in the major.” | “Yu Jiaming stared fixedly at the screen. A click of the mouse, and the interface switched to a PDF of a paper, which turned out to be the one published by the top-ranked girl in the major.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 屏幕的倒影中只有于嘉明一个人，面无表情地浏览着，手指轻轻一动，复制了指导教师的名字，拖到另一个窗口中搜索 | “In the reflection of the screen there was only Yu Jiaming, expressionless as he browsed. His finger moved slightly, copied the name of the supervising professor, and dragged it to another window to search.” | “In the reflection of the screen there was only Yu Jiaming, expressionless as he browsed. His finger moved slightly, copied the name of the supervising professor, and dragged it to another window to search.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 戚林看得心慌，他转头去看江亦深，发现对方早已经汗流浃背 | “Qi Lin felt a creeping unease watching this. He turned to look at Jiang Yishen and found the other person already drenched in cold sweat.” | “Qi Lin felt a creeping unease watching this. He turned to look at Jiang Yishen and found the other person already drenched in cold sweat.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “姑老爷，感觉他要毁了所有人。”江亦深第一次感叹自己这些年行事规矩，没叫人抓到别的把柄 | “”Old Master, I feel like he’s going to ruin everyone.” Jiang Yishen marveled for the first time that he had kept his nose clean all these years, giving no one anything else to grab onto.” | “”Damn, I feel like he’s going to ruin everyone,” Jiang Yishen said. For the first time, he marveled that he had kept his nose clean all these years, giving no one anything else to grab onto.” | Tone shift / Mistranslation | “姑老爷” is a casual exclamation, not a direct address. The original translation treats it as addressing someone, but it’s actually an interjection expressing shock/amazement. Changed to “Damn” to better capture the tone. Also restructured for clarity. |

| 不然别说是保研，这学还上不上得下去都另说 | “Otherwise, never mind the guaranteed postgraduate placement, it would be another question entirely whether he could even finish his degree.” | “Otherwise, never mind the guaranteed postgraduate placement, it would be another question entirely whether he could even finish his degree.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 似乎于嘉明也觉得屋子太暗，抬手把台灯调亮一度，戚林趁机看清了他正对面的墙上贴满了便利贴 | “It seemed Yu Jiaming also felt the room was too dark. He reached up and turned the desk lamp one notch brighter. Qi Lin seized the chance to get a clear look at the wall directly across from him, which was plastered with sticky notes.” | “It seemed Yu Jiaming also felt the room was too dark. He reached up and turned the desk lamp one notch brighter. Qi Lin seized the chance to get a clear look at the wall directly across from him, which was plastered with sticky notes.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 密密麻麻，写满了字，都是高饱和度的马克笔 | “Dense and packed, covered in writing, all in high-saturation marker.” | “Dense and packed, covered in writing, all in high-saturation marker.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 他定睛一看，吓出一身冷汗，狂拍着江亦深的手背 | “He fixed his gaze on them and broke into a cold sweat, frantically slapping the back of Jiang Yishen’s hand.” | “He fixed his gaze on them and broke into a cold sweat, frantically slapping the back of Jiang Yishen’s hand.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 江亦深循着他的视线看去，迎面便是最中央的一张最大的贴纸，是淡黄色的，上面用蓝色的签字笔写着一个名字，被马克笔粗重地圈起来，仿佛力透纸面 | “Jiang Yishen followed his line of sight. Right in the center was the largest note, pale yellow, with a name written on it in blue ballpoint pen, circled heavily in marker as if the force had gone straight through the paper.” | “Jiang Yishen followed his line of sight. Right in the center was the largest note, pale yellow, with a name written on it in blue ballpoint pen, circled heavily in marker as if the force had gone straight through the paper.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “这人谁？” | “”Who’s this person?”” | “”Who’s this person?”” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 江亦深吞咽一下：”不认识。不是我们专业的。” | “Jiang Yishen swallowed: “Don’t know. Not from our major.”” | “Jiang Yishen swallowed: “Don’t know. Not from our major.”” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 何健 | “He Jian.” | “He Jian.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 戚林反复念了几遍，忽然觉得耳熟，好像曾经不止一次地听到过，只是在那些听到的场合中，这个人名的出现无关紧要，没能让他分心记住 | “Qi Lin repeated the name to himself several times and suddenly felt it sounded familiar, as if he had heard it more than once before, only in those contexts where it had come up, the name had been incidental, not enough to make him stop and remember it.” | “Qi Lin repeated the name to himself several times and suddenly felt it sounded familiar, as if he had heard it more than once before. Only in those contexts where it had come up, the name had been incidental, not enough to make him stop and remember it.” | Grammar/punctuation | Minor adjustment: the period after “before” makes the sentence flow better and clarifies the two separate thoughts. |

| 便利贴上写着何健这人的手机号、生日、学院、成绩，在最下面还有家庭住址 | “The sticky note had He Jian’s phone number, birthday, college, grades, and at the bottom, his home address.” | “The sticky note had He Jian’s phone number, birthday, college, grades, and at the bottom, his home address.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “我操，这哪是封神榜，这是死亡笔记。”江亦深连忙在墙上搜寻一遍，没有见到自己的名字，才松一口气 | “”Holy shit, this isn’t an Investiture of the Gods List, this is a death note.” Jiang Yishen hurriedly scanned the wall and, finding his own name absent, let out a breath of relief.” | “”Holy shit, this isn’t an Investiture of the Gods List, this is a death note.” Jiang Yishen hurriedly scanned the wall and, finding his own name absent, let out a breath of relief.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| 戚林缓缓扫视着，他意外地发现这些人并非都是本校生，还有远在其他地区学校的学生，甚至有高中肄业的，有男有女，唯一的共同点是，他们的家庭住址都在同一个省市的同一个区 | “Qi Lin slowly swept his gaze across. He was surprised to find that these people were not all students from this school. There were students from schools in other regions, and even some who had dropped out of high school, both male and female. The only thing they had in common was that their home addresses were all in the same district of the same city in the same province.” | “Qi Lin slowly swept his gaze across. He was surprised to find that these people were not all students from this school. There were students from schools in other regions, and even some who had dropped out of high school, both male and female. The only thing they had in common was that their home addresses were all in the same district of the same city in the same province.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “这些人跟他有仇？”戚林问 | “”Do these people have a grudge against him?” Qi Lin asked.” | “”Do these people have a grudge against him?” Qi Lin asked.” | Accurate | No change needed. |

| “不知道，我跟他根本不熟。”江亦深只觉寒气从脚底往上冒，”我感觉事情有问题，咱们出去合计一下，在这屋里我不敢大声说话。” | “”I don’t know, I barely know him at all.” Jiang Yishen felt a chill rising from the soles of his feet. “I feel like something’s wrong here. Let’s go outside and think it over. I don’t dare speak loudly in this room.”” | “”I don’t know. I barely know him at all.” Jiang Yishen felt a chill rising from the soles of his feet. “I feel like something’s wrong here. Let’s go outside and think it over. I don’t dare speak loudly in this room.”” | Punctuation | Changed comma to period after “know” for better pacing and emphasis. |

| 戚林也觉得这里鬼气森森，蹑手蹑脚地退出去，晒到太阳后才平复下心情 | “Qi Lin also felt the place was thick with an eerie air. He tiptoed out, and only after stepping into