WC ⋆ Chapter 12

# AMENDED TRANSLATION

Jiang Yishen and Qi Lin had known each other for a long time, but the first time they actually spoke was nearly half a year after they had added each other on WeChat.

They were not students from the same college, and at a comprehensive university, not being in the same college was practically as obstructive as being in different provinces. No mutual friends, no group chats or forums to share news through, each of them swallowed up by the crowded cafeteria and teaching buildings.

Adding each other on WeChat had been purely a matter of business. It was during a basketball league held by the school. Qi Lin was a staff member for the opening ceremony, rushing back and forth with a student council badge hanging from his neck. Jiang Yishen was the most unremarkable participant from his department.

Only there were too many coincidences that day. It just so happened that Jiang Yishen was standing at the tail end of his department's lineup, and it just so happened that Qi Lin was carrying a case of water past that spot, and it just so happened that a phone call rang out at that exact moment. Qi Lin stopped beside him, set the water down on the ground, and answered the call.

On the other end, the Minister was saying that the classmate responsible for photography had made a mistake that day and hadn't fully charged the camera, but there were still several speaking occasions coming up that required photos. He was worried phone photos would be subpar, so he wanted Qi Lin to step in and shoot as backup.

Qi Lin agreed. He noticed the idle-looking guy at the back of the lineup watching him, and on a whim asked him to keep an eye on the cases of water for a bit, not to let the team leaders take them, and to wait until he came back to register them one by one.

The guy agreed. By the time Qi Lin and the other staff members finished taking photos, handed off their work, and came rushing back, the cases of water had already vanished without a trace.

The guy said to him, "Senior, the opening ceremony's over and the games are about to start. Waiting around for people to come collect would've been awkward, so I registered them for you while they were taking them. Does that work?"

The guy held up his phone for him to see. On the screen was a memo with neat, line-by-line entries: team leader name, student ID, college, how many cases taken, and in what order.

The guy looked, by stereotype, like someone rough around the edges: short hair, a high nose bridge, sharp eyes, the sort of face that seemed hard to get along with. Yet he was unexpectedly attentive, and had thought everything through with great care.

Qi Lin added him on WeChat. The guy sent him the memo entries he had recorded, and also left his name. He was called Jiang Yishen. Qi Lin thought the name was very easy to say.

Aside from that exchange, they never chatted with each other again.

Qi Lin's work stretched across the entire basketball league, requiring him to coordinate the assignment of referees, though there were no further tasks that required him to be on site. Even so, he would occasionally drop by to join in the excitement, find Jiang Yishen's court from the roster, and watch from the sidelines.

Ordinary university students playing basketball had none of the flashy variety you saw in televised matches, and watching with the naked eye lacked the excitement of a broadcast. Jiang Yishen's technique was above average, though it wasn't as cool or spectacular as one might have imagined. What he had going for him was stamina. By the second half, everyone else had visibly started to flag and was playing with exhaustion, but Jiang Yishen alone maintained the same form he'd had from the start, which made him stand out as particularly impressive.

So that Qi Lin could squeeze to the front without any trouble, he brought his work badge along every time he went to watch, and the moment he stood there, nobody pushed against him at all.

Jiang Yishen would greet him during breaks, probably assuming he was there for work, and never came over to strike up a conversation.

So when the basketball league ended, that light, floating connection dissolved along with it, and they became strangers again, never crossing paths in the vast campus.

As for truly getting to know each other, that came nearly half a year later, beneath the Ferris Wheel, beside the Sanchakou Bus Stop. Fan Zi had been there too, and in one fell swoop managed to land everyone in the hospital. It was a long story, full of drama and awkwardness, and Qi Lin didn't really feel like revisiting it.

He looked at Fan Zi lying half-dead on the hospital bed and let out a sigh. "You've outdone yourself this time. Just wait for the Instructor to deal with you."

Jiang Yishen finished his breakfast. The other roommates came back from outside, and the group gathered around Fan Zi to tease him for a while, worked out a rotation for taking turns keeping him company, and then each went off to do their own thing.

The original plan for today had been to wander around the city together and try their luck. As they walked out of the hospital together, Qi Lin showed Jiang Yishen a page on his phone: a WeChat contact card, which still appeared to be unadded.

"I found the old man from below the temple," he said. "When I went yesterday he wasn't there. I asked a few of the people selling prayer beads by the roadside and got his number."

Jiang Yishen asked, "Has he replied?"

"No. Calling doesn't get a response either. Let's just wait. There's no other option." Qi Lin sighed and stuffed his hand back into his pocket.

"Why are you sure it's connected to this person? Because the wish was unusual?"

Qi Lin glanced at him, pressed his lips together briefly, then said, "The unusual wish is one part of it. Yesterday I noticed that the temporal flow rate near that temple also seems off. I don't know if I'm being too sensitive, but I keep feeling like the clouds there drift differently, the same way they do beneath the Ferris Wheel."

The question of temporal flow rate had been set aside by the two of them for quite some time. Now that it was raised again, Jiang Yishen was a little surprised. "Again? Could it be that places with special significance have a different flow rate?"

"I don't know." Qi Lin shook his head, kicking a small pebble on the ground. "I haven't found the pattern yet."

After leaving the hospital, they stood by the roadside bus stop waiting for the bus. Jiang Yishen breathed out a puff of white vapor, then reached out and closed his hand around the empty air, a gesture that looked quite childish. "I think we should loop through today once."

Qi Lin looked up at him and ventured a guess. "You want to pull Fan Zi back before he gets hit?"

"Yeah." Jiang Yishen's thinking was very simple. Fan Zi was a living, breathing example that had walked right up to their door, unlike anything they had previously tried in terms of interfering with the world.

Before, they had had no way to track the butterfly effect. But Fan Zi was right under their noses, and they could even set up a control group.

Would consciously influencing another person's life produce a completely different result?

Jiang Yishen thought back to New Year's Eve, when he and Qi Lin had sat together in the back row of the bus drawing little stick figures. By that point they had already gathered information related to temporal flow rate: the loop was not a complete reset. There was still a higher-dimensional layer continuing to flow.

If even cats and dogs could react differently, then no single loop was ever truly a "loop."

Jiang Yishen drew a mental mind map and branched it out into several threads.

If each loop they experienced existed as an independent timeline, or more precisely, an independent time-point, a day that was fixed and unchanging…

Would those "time-points" develop into lines somewhere out of sight? Or would they simply remain in the state of a "single-day loop"?

Qi Lin agreed with his thinking. "We can try."

"I can also use it to study for one more day." Jiang Yishen finally revealed his true motive. "The exam's tomorrow. Fan Zi gets to defer his exam now that he's in the hospital. It's not like I have to rescue him just so he can sit the exam with me."

"That's your real reason, isn't it." Qi Lin looked at him with an expression of speechless exasperation.

Holding on to their new conjecture about temporal flow rate, the two of them made a special trip back to school. After all, if there was any place that held special significance for them, school was without question number one. Unfortunately, no matter how carefully they observed, they found nothing to distinguish the school from the outside world.

Their line of thinking hit a dead end again. When they returned to the hospital that evening to visit, they found that Fan Zi, after spending a day in the ward, had somehow managed to add the girl in the next bed on WeChat. She had also gotten a mild concussion from a holiday mishap, and the two of them, sharing the same misfortune, were chatting away enthusiastically.

The girl had a head of striking light-yellow long hair and was naturally easy with people, greeting Fan Zi's roommates without any awkwardness, and warmly inviting everyone to share from the fruit basket she had received.

Qi Lin watched and felt a little uncomfortable. He lowered his voice near Jiang Yishen's ear and said, "If we loop back and fix things, Fan Zi will miss out on his lucky encounter."

Jiang Yishen was peeling an orange. He replied through gritted teeth in a low voice, "Is this supposed to be a lucky encounter for the girl? Look at him. Is he reliable? If not, then forget it."

His voice was very low, but the room was small, and Fan Zi seemed to catch the tail end of it, turning to look at him.

Qi Lin nudged Jiang Yishen with his elbow and got down to business with Fan Zi. "Tell me your timeline from yesterday. Where did you drink, who was there, what time did you head out?"

Understanding the details clearly would let them find Fan Zi accurately after the loop reset. They could always just call him at any point, but Qi Lin still wanted to be thorough and keep the variables to a minimum.

"Why are you asking that?" Fan Zi asked breezily.

"Go on, tell us. I want to hear too." The girl in the next bed laughed and joined in.

Fan Zi then began counting off the details on his fingers. "It was past one in the morning, I didn't even start drinking until after one. Before that I was studying, you know, exams coming up…"

He had barely said two sentences when a phone ringtone came through at a very low volume. He stopped talking, and everyone looked toward the sound at the same time.

Jiang Yishen pulled out his vibrating phone, glanced at it, and his expression suddenly went a little strange. He patted Qi Lin on the shoulder and stepped outside to take the call.

Qi Lin watched him leave, then turned back and stared blankly at Fan Zi.

Fan Zi still had his fingers raised, and paused for a moment. "Continue?"

"Yeah." Qi Lin nodded, but a weight had suddenly dropped in his chest. He glanced distractedly toward the door. Fan Zi's words slid right past him, in one ear and out the other, and he retained nothing.

Just now, Jiang Yishen had deliberately tilted his phone so Qi Lin could catch a glimpse. There was no name saved for the contact, but Qi Lin could recognize it. +852. It was a call from Jiang Yishen's mom.

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# ISSUE LOG

| Chinese Source | Original English | Corrected Version | Issue Type | Explanation |

|—|—|—|—|—|

| 教学楼 | Teaching Building | teaching buildings | Naming inconsistency | The original uses plural "楼" (buildings) to refer to multiple structures on campus. Singular "Teaching Building" suggests a single building. |

| 他们加上微信纯属公事公办 | Adding each other on WeChat had been purely a matter of business | Adding each other on WeChat had been purely a matter of business | Grammar/Tone | Minor: the phrasing is acceptable but slightly formal. The original conveys transactional necessity. No change needed. |

| 怕手机拍的有瑕疵 | he was worried phone photos would be subpar | he was worried phone photos would be subpar | Tone | Acceptable. "Subpar" captures the sense of "瑕疵" (flaws/defects). |

| 不要让领队们拿走 | not to let the team leaders take them | not to let the team leaders take them | Accuracy | Acceptable. "领队" refers to team leaders/captains. |

| 挨个登记 | register them one by one | register them one by one | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 学长 | Senior | Senior | Naming/Title | Correct. "学长" is a respectful form of address for an older student. |

| 短头发，高鼻梁，眼型很锐利，不太好相处的模样 | short hair, a high nose bridge, sharp eyes, the sort of face that seemed hard to get along with | short hair, a high nose bridge, sharp eyes, the sort of face that seemed hard to get along with | Accuracy | Acceptable. Captures the description well. |

| 却意外的心细 | Yet he was unexpectedly attentive | Yet he was unexpectedly attentive | Accuracy | Correct. "心细" means attentive/meticulous. |

| 做事情想得很周到 | and had thought everything through with great care | and had thought everything through with great care | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 他叫江亦深，戚林觉得这个名字很好念 | He was called Jiang Yishen. Qi Lin thought the name was very easy to say | He was called Jiang Yishen. Qi Lin thought the name was very easy to say | Accuracy | Correct. "好念" means easy to pronounce/say. |

| 除了这条信息，他们没有再和彼此聊过天 | Aside from that exchange, they never chatted with each other again | Aside from that exchange, they never chatted with each other again | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 凑凑热闹 | join in the excitement | join in the excitement | Tone | Correct. "凑热闹" conveys casual participation in something lively. |

| 对着花名册找到江亦深的赛场 | find Jiang Yishen's court from the roster | find Jiang Yishen's court from the roster | Accuracy | Correct. "花名册" is a roster/list of names. |

| 凑在一旁围观 | watch from the sidelines | watch from the sidelines | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 普通大学生打篮球没有电视比赛里那样花样百出 | Ordinary university students playing basketball had none of the flashy variety you saw in televised matches | Ordinary university students playing basketball had none of the flashy variety you saw in televised matches | Accuracy | Correct. "花样百出" means varied/flashy techniques. |

| 用肉眼看也不像电视转播那样热血 | watching with the naked eye lacked the excitement of a broadcast | watching with the naked eye lacked the excitement of a broadcast | Tone | Correct. "热血" conveys excitement/passion. |

| 江亦深打球的技术是水平线之上 | Jiang Yishen's technique was above average | Jiang Yishen's technique was above average | Accuracy | Correct. "水平线之上" means above the average level. |

| 虽然也没有想象中那样酷炫又精彩 | though it wasn't as cool or spectacular as one might have imagined | though it wasn't as cool or spectacular as one might have imagined | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 但胜在体力好 | What he had going for him was stamina | What he had going for him was stamina | Accuracy | Correct. "胜在" means "what gives him an advantage is." |

| 下半场时明显每个人都略有颓态 | By the second half, everyone else had visibly started to flag | By the second half, everyone else had visibly started to flag | Accuracy | Correct. "颓态" means a flagging/declining state. |

| 打得很疲惫 | was playing with exhaustion | was playing with exhaustion | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 只有江亦深还维持着最初的状态 | but Jiang Yishen alone maintained the same form he'd had from the start | but Jiang Yishen alone maintained the same form he'd had from the start | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 凸显得格外帅气 | which made him stand out as particularly impressive | which made him stand out as particularly impressive | Tone | Acceptable, though "帅气" more directly means "handsome/cool." "Impressive" captures the admiration but loses the physical attraction element. Better: "which made him stand out as particularly cool/handsome." |

| 为了能无痛挤到前排 | So that Qi Lin could squeeze to the front without any trouble | So that Qi Lin could squeeze to the front without any trouble | Accuracy | Correct. "无痛" means "without pain/trouble." |

| 压根没人挤他 | nobody pushed against him at all | nobody pushed against him at all | Accuracy | Correct. "压根" means "not at all/completely." |

| 江亦深便会在暂停时和他打招呼 | Jiang Yishen would greet him during breaks | Jiang Yishen would greet him during breaks | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 也许是以为他在工作 | probably assuming he was there for work | probably assuming he was there for work | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 从来没有凑上来搭过话 | and never came over to strike up a conversation | and never came over to strike up a conversation | Accuracy | Correct. "凑上来搭话" means to come over and start a conversation. |

| 于是等到篮球联赛结束，这段轻飘飘的关系便随之消散 | So when the basketball league ended, that light, floating connection dissolved along with it | So when the basketball league ended, that light, floating connection dissolved along with it | Accuracy | Correct. "轻飘飘" conveys something insubstantial/fleeting. |

| 他们又变回了陌生人 | and they became strangers again | and they became strangers again | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 在偌大的校园里没有再碰过面 | never crossing paths in the vast campus | never crossing paths in the vast campus | Accuracy | Correct. "偌大" means vast/enormous. |

| 至于真正互相认识，是在小半年后的摩天轮下、三岔河口公交站边 | As for truly getting to know each other, that came nearly half a year later, beneath the Ferris Wheel, beside the Sanchakou Bus Stop | As for truly getting to know each other, that came nearly half a year later, beneath the Ferris Wheel, beside the Sanchakou Bus Stop | Accuracy | Correct. The location names are preserved. |

| 那一次凡子也在，还一举将所有人干进医院 | Fan Zi had been there too, and in one fell swoop managed to land everyone in the hospital | Fan Zi had been there too, and in one fell swoop managed to land everyone in the hospital | Accuracy | Correct. "干进医院" is colloquial for "get everyone into the hospital." |

| 说来话长，充满抓马和尴尬 | It was a long story, full of drama and awkwardness | It was a long story, full of drama and awkwardness | Tone | Correct. "抓马" is internet slang for "drama" (from "trauma"). |

| 戚林不太想回忆了 | and Qi Lin didn't really feel like revisiting it | and Qi Lin didn't really feel like revisiting it | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 他看着在床上半死不活的凡子 | He looked at Fan Zi lying half-dead on the hospital bed | He looked at Fan Zi lying half-dead on the hospital bed | Accuracy | Correct. "半死不活" means half-dead/barely alive. |

| 叹了口气 | let out a sigh | let out a sigh | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 你这次比那次还过火 | You've outdone yourself this time | You've outdone yourself this time | Tone | Correct. "过火" means to go overboard/overdo it. |

| 等着导员收拾你吧 | Just wait for the Instructor to deal with you | Just wait for the Instructor to deal with you | Accuracy | Correct. "导员" is a university instructor/counselor. |

| 江亦深把早饭吃完 | Jiang Yishen finished his breakfast | Jiang Yishen finished his breakfast | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 几个室友也从外面回来 | The other roommates came back from outside | The other roommates came back from outside | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 一群人围在凡子身边打趣了一会儿 | and the group gathered around Fan Zi to tease him for a while | and the group gathered around Fan Zi to tease him for a while | Accuracy | Correct. "打趣" means to tease/joke. |

| 商量着轮番陪护 | worked out a rotation for taking turns keeping him company | worked out a rotation for taking turns keeping him company | Accuracy | Correct. "轮番陪护" means to take turns keeping someone company. |

| 便各干各的去 | and then each went off to do their own thing | and then each went off to do their own thing | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 今天的计划原本是一起在城市里四处转转，碰碰运气 | The original plan for today had been to wander around the city together and try their luck | The original plan for today had been to wander around the city together and try their luck | Accuracy | Correct. "四处转转" means to wander around. "碰碰运气" means to try one's luck. |

| 他们一起走出医院时 | As they walked out of the hospital together | As they walked out of the hospital together | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 戚林向江亦深展示了一下手机页面 | Qi Lin showed Jiang Yishen a page on his phone | Qi Lin showed Jiang Yishen a page on his phone | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 是一张微信名片 | a WeChat contact card | a WeChat contact card | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 看着还未添加好友 | which still appeared to be unadded | which still appeared to be unadded | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 我找到寺庙下面那个老头了 | I found the old man from below the temple | I found the old man from below the temple | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 昨天我去的时候他不在 | When I went yesterday he wasn't there | When I went yesterday he wasn't there | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 我问了几个在路边卖手串的 | I asked a few of the people selling prayer beads by the roadside | I asked a few of the people selling prayer beads by the roadside | Accuracy | Correct. "手串" are prayer beads/bracelets. |

| 拿到了他的号码 | and got his number | and got his number | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 有回复吗 | Has he replied | Has he replied | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. Should be "Has he replied?" |

| 没有，打电话也不回 | No. Calling doesn't get a response either | No. Calling doesn't get a response either | Accuracy | Correct. |

| 等等吧，没有其他办法了 | Let's just wait. There's no other option | Let's just wait. There's no other option. | Punctuation | Original missing period at end. |

| 戚林叹了口气，把手揣回口袋里 | Qi Lin sighed and stuffed his hand back into his pocket | Qi Lin sighed and stuffed his hand back into his pocket. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 你为什么确定和这个人有关 | Why are you sure it's connected to this person | Why are you sure it's connected to this person? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 因为愿望很特殊吗 | Because the wish was unusual | Because the wish was unusual? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 戚林看了他一眼，抿了下唇角，才说 | Qi Lin glanced at him, pressed his lips together briefly, then said | Qi Lin glanced at him, pressed his lips together briefly, then said, | Punctuation | Colon or comma expected before dialogue. |

| 愿望特殊是一方面 | The unusual wish is one part of it | The unusual wish is one part of it. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 我昨天发现，那个寺庙附近的时空流速也不太对 | Yesterday I noticed that the temporal flow rate near that temple also seems off | Yesterday I noticed that the temporal flow rate near that temple also seems off. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 不知道是不是我太敏感 | I don't know if I'm being too sensitive | I don't know if I'm being too sensitive, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 我老是觉得那里的云也飘得不一样，像摩天轮下那样 | but I keep feeling like the clouds there drift differently, the same way they do beneath the Ferris Wheel | but I keep feeling like the clouds there drift differently, the same way they do beneath the Ferris Wheel. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 时空流速这一命题早已被他们搁置许久 | The question of temporal flow rate had been set aside by the two of them for quite some time | The question of temporal flow rate had been set aside by the two of them for quite some time. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 如今重新提起 | Now that it was raised again | Now that it was raised again, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 江亦深有些惊讶 | Jiang Yishen was a little surprised | Jiang Yishen was a little surprised. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 又来 | Again | Again? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 难道是有特殊意义的地方，流速就会不一样 | Could it be that places with special significance have a different flow rate | Could it be that places with special significance have a different flow rate? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 不知道 | I don't know | I don't know. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 戚林摇摇头，踢着地上的小石子 | Qi Lin shook his head, kicking a small pebble on the ground | Qi Lin shook his head, kicking a small pebble on the ground. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 我还没有发现规律 | I haven't found the pattern yet | I haven't found the pattern yet. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 走出医院，他们站在路边公交站旁等车 | After leaving the hospital, they stood by the roadside bus stop waiting for the bus | After leaving the hospital, they stood by the roadside bus stop waiting for the bus. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 江亦深呼出一口白气 | Jiang Yishen breathed out a puff of white vapor | Jiang Yishen breathed out a puff of white vapor, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 伸手在虚空中握了握 | then reached out and closed his hand around the empty air | then reached out and closed his hand around the empty air, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 瞧着是很幼稚的小动作 | a gesture that looked quite childish | a gesture that looked quite childish. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 我觉得我们可以把今天循环一遍 | I think we should loop through today once | I think we should loop through today once. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 戚林抬头看他 | Qi Lin looked up at him | Qi Lin looked up at him, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 试探着猜测 | and ventured a guess | and ventured a guess. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 你想在凡子撞车之前把他捞回来 | You want to pull Fan Zi back before he gets hit | You want to pull Fan Zi back before he gets hit? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 嗯 | Yeah | Yeah. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 江亦深的想法非常简单 | Jiang Yishen's thinking was very simple | Jiang Yishen's thinking was very simple. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 凡子就是一个活生生送上门的好例子 | Fan Zi was a living, breathing example that had walked right up to their door | Fan Zi was a living, breathing example that had walked right up to their door, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 和之前他们试图对世界造成的干扰都不一样 | unlike anything they had previously tried in terms of interfering with the world | unlike anything they had previously tried in terms of interfering with the world. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 从前他们没办法对蝴蝶效应进行追踪 | Before, they had had no way to track the butterfly effect | Before, they had had no way to track the butterfly effect. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 而凡子就在眼皮子底下 | But Fan Zi was right under their noses | But Fan Zi was right under their noses, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 甚至还能做出来对照组 | and they could even set up a control group | and they could even set up a control group. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 有意识地影响他人的人生，会带来截然不同的结果吗 | Would consciously influencing another person's life produce a completely different result | Would consciously influencing another person's life produce a completely different result? | Punctuation | Original missing question mark. |

| 江亦深想到跨年那天 | Jiang Yishen thought back to New Year's Eve | Jiang Yishen thought back to New Year's Eve, | Punctuation | Comma expected before continuing clause. |

| 他和戚林一起在公交车的最后一排画小人 | when he and Qi Lin had sat together in the back row of the bus drawing little stick figures | when he and Qi Lin had sat together in the back row of the bus drawing little stick figures. | Punctuation | Original missing period. |

| 那时他们已经收集到了时空流速相关的信息 | By that point they had already gathered information related to temporal flow rate | By that point they had already gathered information related to temporal flow rate: | Punctuation | Colon expected before explanation. |

| 循环并不是完全重置，仍有更高维的层面在流动 | the loop was not a complete reset; there was still a higher-dimensional layer continuing to flow | the loop was not a complete reset. There was still a higher-dimensional layer continuing to flow. | Punctuation | Original uses semicolon; period is